so the way this went was up in bed this morning after second coffee. only paper sticky notes (pink) sitting quiet spacey then this came first the tongues then other bits. Now I’ll transcribe into first ruff draft. this time using keyboard. sometimes a yellow pad is the first transcription. Sometimes there is only one sometimes there are many edits, the number depends on my things but mostly on my self. some photos of the original notes as you may see it is part of the illegible scribble that is an integral part of the process .
So the first bit =
And she said look
And I did seeing the play of sunlight slip
along the green hills a silver streak above the valley
a river mirroring catching sapphires between the roiling cumulus clouds….
SO Right away i notice too many the’s breaking up the image. Also I need to look up cumulus to make sure hos are the clouds I want… lets try it this way ~
she said look so I did seeing the play of sunlight slip
along green hills a silver streak along the valley
a river mirroring, catching sapphires from between cumulus clouds
Or Wait Maybe This ?
she said look so I did seeing the play of sunlight slip
along green hills a silver streak along the valley
a river mirroring, catching sapphires from between the cumulus…
So as you can tell or if not let me tell you it is a longish process sometimes. Anyway here’s the rest a first ruff ~
How the Goddess of Wisdom Taught Me the Tarantella
she said look so I did seeing the play of sunlight slip
along green hills a silver streak along the valley
a river mirroring, catching sapphires from between the cumulus
she said sing
so i offered
breathless wordless a what else can i do but be true refrain
harmonic of all i’d seen and all i’d ever see
she said dance
so we embraced a dance named for spiders
mingling sweat lead our lips to meet
undisciplined tongues ballerinas inside our mouths
she said hush
so i took breath
together we sunk dampness upon a warm green earth
she said know
and I was certain.
